2014考研英語寫作160篇:論時間(考生作文批改及評分)_跨考網(wǎng)

　　寫作原文

　?、貯s is vividly betrayed in the cartoon, a juvenile, with great efforts, is pushing a clock hand fordward(拼寫錯誤，改為forward), becase(拼寫錯誤，改為because) he is curious about his futre, (拼寫錯誤，改為future;逗號改為句號) an(改為An) old man, however, is doing his utmost to push the clock hand backward, because he wants to retrospect his old days. ②Apparantly(拼寫錯誤，改為Apparently), what they do is ultimately futile.①Simple as the picture is, its symbolic meaning subtly conveyed(前面加which，構(gòu)成定語從句，修飾symbolic meaning;conveyed時態(tài)使用錯誤。因此，可改為which subtly conveys) is profound and thought-provoking. ②There is little dispute that time is a sovereign gift for all peple(拼寫錯誤，改為people) and no one is expected to manipulate or speed up it (speed up為動副結(jié)構(gòu)，修飾代詞時，代詞放中間;可改為speed it up). ③So, attempting a life (加is,構(gòu)成be filled with)filled with no regrets, one should employ his time well, otherwise, a humilating(拼寫錯誤，改為humiliating) future will be not far away from us. ④In addition, the old saying:"Time and tide wait for no man" also highlights the magnitude of cherishing time. ⑤Therefore, what we are supposed to do everyday is to make use of every chance to do useful things.①As far as I'm concerned, time invariably treats everyone equally. ②One can become informed and wise by treasuring time. ③Mo Yan, for example, who cherishes every minutes(every+名詞單數(shù)，將minutes改為minute) to think and contemplate (句子缺成分，加“, and he”)has achieved great success in his works. ④Hence let's keep the aphorism in mind forever, that is:"A young idler , (標點使用有誤，英語中，每個標點符號后面應(yīng)該空一個字符，然后再繼續(xù)書寫單詞)an old beggar".

　　原作點評:

　　第一段描述圖畫的內(nèi)容,應(yīng)注意拼寫問題。第二段揭示圖畫的寓意，深入探討珍惜時間的重要性;第①句注意時態(tài)的正確使用;第②句注意單詞拼寫及動副結(jié)構(gòu)的使用。第三段通過舉名人的例子及格言“少壯不努力，老大徒傷悲”，點明文章主題?？傮w點評文章亮點：文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整，每個段落的功能基本得以體現(xiàn)。文章錯誤：①語法錯誤：文章出現(xiàn)了少量的語法錯誤，比如時態(tài)一致性問題;every+名詞單數(shù)等。②拼寫問題：單詞拼寫錯誤情況較為嚴重，望細心改正。

　　修改意見：

　　文章整體構(gòu)思、用詞還不錯，但是單詞拼寫錯誤較多。希望作者在以后的寫作中，避免這一問題的發(fā)生。同時要注意在復習過程中，留意一些基本的語法點，減少作文中的錯誤?？梢越Y(jié)合英語寫作范文，積累更多的詞匯和句子，為作文添彩。加油，祝你考研成功!!

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